Certainly. I’ll rewrite the story, focusing on improving grammar, punctuation, spelling, and clarity. Here’s the revised version: Verna worked as a cashier at Savemoores Supermarket for 45 years. When she began her cashiering career, the store was a tiny convenience store. Today, it’s a 75,000-square-foot behemoth. It had three cashier lanes in 1974; now it…
Tag: Short Stories
The Barren Pines (Weekly Writing Project)
I wrote this in script form with the intent of doing a short film. I’ve been enamored with Jersey folklore as far back as my memory goes. ____________ THE BARREN PINES EXT. WOODS – DAY Shots within a dark, gloomy forest, Tall pine trees shield most of the sunlight. The ground is sandy and covered…
The Haunting of Spill House
Certainly! Here’s the revised version of the story with improved grammar, punctuation, spelling, and clarity: Julian and I wrote the framework of this story over some Bueno Y Sano nachos while John danced hip-hop next door. Our first story, “The Scary Derriery,” focused on potty talk. The second was about a kid who couldn’t stop…
Drive Thru
Drive Thru A fictional tale inspired by a photo I had taken of a burned McDonalds I had made about ten years ago. ____________ File Number: 43423423_29_1 Recording Number 203322222_342_343_pm mcdonalds_arson TRANSCRIPT OF INTERVIEW OF Doctor Joseph Sipnassy with Detective Steve Henry: Whereupon, the following proceedings were had in Bartlesville Police Department on October 14,…
Daylight Bleeds
I wrote this script almost twenty years ago. It chronicles an experiment on a man convicted of murder. His memory is erased, replaced with a new narrative and he’s released back into the public. I like the idea of rehabilitation but I’m sure I’d do everything differently now but enjoyed re-reading. The screenplay “Daylight Bleeds”begins…